Posted by VHunter on 7/23/2007, 3:50 pm, in reply to "Re: Outline"
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Whoa! Those are awesome pix. Are those from that game too?
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: That way will be just fine.
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: Linda and Jack Holmes, I added the one with
: Jack postrate because I only have two
: pictures of him. Though it looks like Hugh
: laid out.
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: --Previous Message--
: That is going to be so sad....
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: We can write it that way, but what I had
: actually meant was that I would write the
: flashbacks that Hugh was having (which will
: be Holmes') & you could do the
: flashbacks that Holmes would have (which
: would be Hughs). That might be better so
: that our character styles woudn't get mixed
: up. We could do it either way.
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: --Previous Message--
: Mmm... I should probably give you an outline
: since we were talking about my writing
: Holmes's flash back and you writing Hugh's.
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: Hugh's family is at the sussex cottage that
: Holmes had retired to almost a century ago
: for Christmas. As always they are the first
: ones there and have a few days till a few of
: the other realatives. It's the morning, Jack
: Holmes has left for the village to pick up
: some presents sent for through the post.
:
: Hugh is at the cottage with his mother. Just
: finished violin practic, talks to his mother
: who has just finished making a few cupcakes.
: She made extra for Hugh's friend Dan who
: Hugh met that last two times they came out
: to sussex. Hugh leaves with two cup cakes
: after giving his mother a note for his
: father about how he believes his friend Dan
: who he saw just the other day is being abuse
: by his father. Hugh then leaves to met Dan
: at a bridge over an extremely old, man made
: aquaduct that leads out to the ocean.
:
: Dan, I would suggest has brown hair and
: eyes. Also he's older then Hugh. Is a
: scapegoat for local children. His fahter has
: hit him in the past, claiming and filing
: reports in the past claiming that Dan has
: been fighting with unknown local boys. Dan
: unfortunately believes that his father does
: what he does out of love because his mother
: was no good and killed herself one winter
: five years ago. Dan has misguided love for
: his father dispite the way he's being
: treated.
:
: So when Hugh confronts Dan about what his
: father is doing and possible police
: envolvement Dan attacks him.
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: I was thinking, Dan hits Hugh by surprise
: causing Hugh fall down the small bridge the
: snow covered grass, close to the steap side
: of the aquaduct. Dan is attacking Hugh again
: when Hugh bashs Dan in the side of the head
: with a rock as hard has he can.
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: Dan goes over in the aquaduct and Hugh tries
: to save him. Forced to shore by the cold
: Hugh struggles out of the aquaduct back to
: home. He makes it back just before sucomes
: to the cold.
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: When he wakes he tells the adults that Dan
: and him were playing/wrestling on the
: snowcover ground when Dan fellover the side
: with Hugh tumbling after him. He tells them
: that he couldn't find Dan.
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: --Previous Message--
: Sounds good to me. What else did you have in
: mind?
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: --Previous Message--
: Yeah, we could do that.
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: --Previous Message--
: Or maybe not even an entire scene, but more
: like a series of disconnected shots....then
: that might prove to be exceedingly difficult
: to write...lol
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: --Previous Message--
: If you like we could have a flash forward to
: a
: scene in a future case where one of them is
: in trouble or the other one is caring for
: the other, being the other is injured.
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: --Previous Message--
: Hmmm...no I think that about does it. Now
: are
: we doing more than one or just their
: childhood ones?
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: --Previous Message--
: Looks like we caught the french connection.
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: Okay... Sounds good...
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: Is there anything else you would like to add
: about the flash back?
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